The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The argument states that the accidents involving mopeds, a popular mode of transport on Balmer Island, and pedestrians have increased. This can be mitigated by reducing the number of rental mopeds. This argument overlooks come implications and also considers certain assumptions that undermines this argument. The reasons that undermine the statement is due to following reasons.
The first assumption that the argument makes is that by decreasing the numbers of moped rentals from 50 to 25 during summer season will reduce the accidents. This assumption does not guarantee that the accidents involving people and mopeds will definitely decrease. It may happen that those 25 rental mopeds may cause more accidents than the previous 50 ones.
Secondly the argument mentions the people flocking the islands only in the month of summer. There is no reference to the people visiting the Balmer islands in seaons other than summer. Before implementing any policies these factors should also be considered.
The argument takes reference for the Town councils decision to reduce number of mopeds to the town of Seaville. Where the town council of Seaville had decided to reduce the mopeds number to reduce accidents. In seaville this decision gave positive results by reducing the accidents to nearly half the accidents of occurred annually. But it should also me taken in notice that what worked for Seaville may or may not produce the same outcome in Balmer. Balmer and Seaville are both different based on number of people visiting these islands, geographical locations of the two towns, etc.
Therefore as stated above due to flawed assumptions and unreasonable considerations the argument does not hold strong enough
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 272 350
No. of Characters: 1421 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.061 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.224 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.637 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.402 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 186, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er islands in seaons other than summer. Before implementing any policies these factors...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 113, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Where” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mber of mopeds to the town of Seaville. Where the town council of Seaville had decide...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 587, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aphical locations of the two towns, etc. Therefore as stated above due to flawed ...
^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... locations of the two towns, etc. Therefore as stated above due to flawed assumptio...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 272.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38970588235 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69534944467 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.1457470311 57.8364921388 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.625 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224885200022 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761759938208 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551285631079 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109418986102 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564874091989 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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