The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author suggests that a business would prosper if it hires people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night on the basis of a study that showed an association between the amounts of sleeps the executives need and the success of their firms. This argument may look righteous at first glance, but a closer look raises a few questions. To legitimize the argument the below stated queries must be acknowledged.
Firstly, the conclusion that the firms should hire people who require less than 6-hour sleep is faulty. Various scientific studies over the years have successfully shown that an average human requires at least 6-8 hours to work efficiently. A person’s lifestyle has a deep impact on productivity, and, part of a healthy lifestyle is a healthy sleeping schedule. Only healthy executives would be an asset to the business firm. An unhealthy individual wouldn’t be of any use to the institution. So, the author’s point that less sleep would make executives more productive doesn’t hold water.
Secondly, the author is associating the success of the business entirely with the sleep schedule of the executives. The author is completely overlooking some vital factors like work hours, the potential of the executive, hard work, etc which weigh more to success of the business than one’s sleeping schedule. The author comes to a conclusion via a study that completely ignored some of the crucial aspects that give to the success of the business. Hence, it weakens the author’s front.
Finally, the author doesn’t provide sufficient proof to support the study implying the association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their respective firms. We are obscure about the work conditions of the executives who participated in this study. Also, the author is assuming that the conditions of all the workspaces is alike, which is fallacious. If the author had furnished us with further information, the argument would’ve been more acceptable.
The above-stated reasons nullify the author’s claim. To come to a conclusion based on the now provided information wouldn’t be a sound one. Had the author provided more details, the argument would’ve been credible.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1795 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.931 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.712 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.992 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ion via a study that completely ignored some of the crucial aspects that give to the succes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31284916201 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06116323104 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513966480447 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0168721533 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168755942755 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528709969134 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069424583835 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100631213979 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705473747293 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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