The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted
The self governing thing of any country is purely based on their strength of their borders and if any threat is posed to the country by an illegal immigrants in order to protect the countries threat by returning them to their native land. It seems logical at first glance. We need to analyze the flaws and gives ideas to overcome this flaws.
First, the autonomy of any country is mainly based on its strength of its borders. The country's welfare and protection depends on various factors not only in military or defense purposes. This defense and all are one of the things we need to take into consideration. The main thing is country's economy. The economical condition is the solution to many problems. To improve the economic condition, we need non-native members to improve the welfare of the country. The immigrants of this type do not possess any type of dangerous activities. They are merely workers. For example, if we take US, it has large of non native workers working under one company. They are working day and night to improve themselves and also to improve the economic conditions. So the author assumption is wrong.
Secondly, foreigners are the ones who itinerary persons for their enjoyment and also to learn a lot about the cultural activities of other countries. Shall we consider them as a threat or a person who loves to enjoy and learn a lot about other peoples culture? So it depends incisively on which profession thy are in and what they are going to do. Many people attracts to the foreign cultures also and marry a women or men from there. The authors vision provide an improvident information.
Thirdly,many heard of the terrorists attack all over the country. The persons who have the link to terrorism and terrorists are the ones who will surely pose the threat to the country. To avoid this or keep in control we need to take into measure to evacuate them and return them to their main land either in a dead state or with normal human thing. This is the main thing for the government to ensure the safety of the people. Here the author fact is somewhat partially correct but not all the things.
In conclusion,the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author mentioned all the relevant facts.In order to assess the information we need to have a knowledge about all the contributing factors.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly. it comes with a new argument: 'The main thing is country's economy.', why?
argument 2 -- need to argue: 'if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. '
argument 3 -- need to argue: 'Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 1956 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.668 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.545 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.115 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.737 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.245 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.432 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'immigrant'?
Suggestion: immigrant
...t is posed to the country by an illegal immigrants in order to protect the countries threa...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a woman' or simply 'women'?
Suggestion: a woman; women
... to the foreign cultures also and marry a women or men from there. The authors vision p...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: WOMAN_WOMEN[1]
Message: 'woman' is the singular form of 'women'. Consider using 'woman'?
Suggestion: woman
...o the foreign cultures also and marry a women or men from there. The authors vision p...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , many
...e an improvident information. Thirdly,many heard of the terrorists attack all over...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ut not all the things. In conclusion,the argument is flawed for the above mentio...
^^^^
Line 9, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...author mentioned all the relevant facts.In order to assess the information we need...
^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ge about all the contributing factors.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82211538462 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67630892049 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502403846154 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6673011365 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.1538461538 119.503703932 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23076923077 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129853703665 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0342534921778 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859399088799 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.070629559411 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698310825886 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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