The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
The security of any country is hugely determined by how safe and secure its borders are with respect to illegal immigrants entering a country. The author argues that illegal immigrants must be returned to their country of origin to strengthen a country's autonomy.
One of the primary assumptions here is that every illegal immigrant will endanger the country's economy and national security. This assumption is not corroborated with any evidence of how immigrants have in the past endangered the nation's security. For example, the author should provide specific cases of security breaches which have been perpetrated by illegal immigrants and not their own residents.
Another assumption is that illegal immigrants from all countries pose a security threat to a nation. This assumption is not supported by any evidence of illegal immigrants of which all nations have been found to have caused a security threat in the past. Clearly, all nations cannot be imposed with the same stringent norms if no evidences are found against them. The author needs to provide a specific list of countries whose originating illegal immigrants should not be allowed to enter another country.
In the past, war-like situations have forced many civilians to flee their homelands and search for peaceful lands to dwell. These situations must be mentioned by the author before attempting to return illegal immigrants to their country of origin. Such measures will help curtail the unwanted loss of civilian lives in such politically disturbed areas. These rescued civilians cannot be considered a threat to nation's security unless proved otherwise.
In conclusion, the author has mentioned a statement which has not been supported by any evidences of crimes perpetrated by illegal immigrants alone. Any political step against illegal immigrants requires the intervention of human rights groups, united nations groups and various other security agencies before an attempt is made to return them to their country of origin.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 313 350
No. of Characters: 1667 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.206 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.326 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.725 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.815 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.267 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.612 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...igrants have in the past endangered the nations security. For example, the author shoul...
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Line 9, column 439, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ific list of countries whose originating illegal immigrants should not be allowed...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then, well, for example, in conclusion, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 313.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45367412141 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75258483052 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482428115016 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9485484716 57.8364921388 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.8 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93333333333 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256198626089 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105746588402 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617227505085 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168827655226 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576596585413 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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