The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council."An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East M

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The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where consumption of the plant beneficia is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of beneficia can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of nutritional supplements derived from beneficia. We predict this will dramatically reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The argument makes a number of unsubatantiated assumptions regarding use of nutritional supplements derived from beneficia for decreasing absenteeism in schools and workplaces. In general, careful examination this supporting evedence reveals that it lends little credible evidence to the application’claim. There remaind some questions that need answering before any steps can be taken.
The argument claims that plant beneficia in East Meria is very high. However, there are no any information, numbers or compatison with consumption of this plant in West Meria. It could have been that the consumption of this plant in West Meria the same as in West Meria or the population of East Meria much higher than in West Meriaand as a result the consumption is larger. Without more information about comarison of consumption of beneficia in these two cities the assumption is not effective.
Another unstated assumption the argument makes is that the situation in East Meria is good example for increasing consumption of beneficia in West Meria. Nevertheles, there is no other information about condition in East Meria. For instance, it could have been that the preventative measures in East Meria is better: sport is more popular in the city or it is popular in East Meria to have yearly visit to doctor. Unless the author povides the comparison between these two cities it might have been a mistake to add this plant in people’s nutrition.
Besides it, the argument claims that colds are the main reason for absentism from work and school. But, it are no information or numbers about it. For example, the most frequently reseason could have been broken legs or hands. Without tables with this information it could have been a wrong decision to add plant beneficia.
In conclusion, the recommendation to use of nutritional supplements derived from beneficia is not well-supported. In strentghen it the author has to provide more information about consumption of beneficia in East Meria per people and compare it with consumption of beneficia in West Meria per people. the author must also provide evidence that the factors affecting to the level of people that have cold are essential the same in these two towns. Moreover, the author has to provide better evidence that the main reason for absentism from work is colds. Unless, the assumptins addressed the argument will fall apert and it might have been a mistake to add plant beneficia in food.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 88, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... Meria is very high. However, there are no any information, numbers or compatison ...
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Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'visited'.
Suggestion: visited
...is popular in East Meria to have yearly visit to doctor. Unless the author povides th...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 107, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...absentism from work and school. But, it are no information or numbers about it. For...
^^^
Line 5, column 301, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... of beneficia in West Meria per people. the author must also provide evidence that ...
^^^
Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: ESSENTIAL_ESSENTIALLY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'essentially'?
Suggestion: essentially
... the level of people that have cold are essential the same in these two towns. Moreover, ...
^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'however', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'well', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in general', 'as a result']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.308219178082 0.25644967241 120% => OK
Verbs: 0.139269406393 0.15541462614 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0662100456621 0.0836205057962 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.027397260274 0.0520304965353 53% => OK
Pronouns: 0.027397260274 0.0272364105082 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.157534246575 0.125424944231 126% => OK
Participles: 0.0388127853881 0.0416121511921 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.01905620788 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0228310502283 0.026700313972 86% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.107305936073 0.113004496875 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0205479452055 0.0255425247493 80% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00456621004566 0.0127820249294 36% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2455.0 2731.13054187 90% => OK
No of words: 398.0 446.07635468 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.16834170854 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.354271356784 0.378187486979 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.281407035176 0.287650121315 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.206030150754 0.208842608468 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.160804020101 0.135150697306 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01905620788 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 207.018472906 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422110552764 0.469332199767 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.4775269979 52.1807786196 85% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9719847041 57.7814097925 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.75 141.986410481 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.7 0.724660767414 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 48.0407035176 51.9672348444 92% => OK
Elegance: 2.6 1.8405768891 141% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41967416767 0.441005458295 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.14818965413 0.135418324435 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0922002705803 0.0829849096947 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.559275204748 0.58762219726 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.115221754385 0.147661913831 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177948091818 0.193483328276 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944971317067 0.0970749176394 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.379706320676 0.42659136922 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.149525276315 0.0774707102158 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292218315571 0.312017818177 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.097791061225 0.0698173142475 140% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.87684729064 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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