"Last week, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further."
water is an essential resource for living and it's another name is life. In the passage, it is observed that sunnyside corporation want augment their profit, so all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the sunnyside Towers complex are modified and resist the water flow amount to one-third of what is used to be. Every person in the society desires to earn more profit from from their investment as sunnyside corporation wants.But it is not lucid that restriction of water flow in showerheads will prevent wasting water more and will engender their profits. For this reason, I am not corroborate with the conclusion that they have made.
Normally showerheads are most propbably used when someone need shower. In the passage, there is no indication that most of the water is being used through the showeheads. it is possible, most houses use kitchen taps, then it will be superfluous to control the water of showeheads. Besides, most of the water related works are done by using tap water. If they only modify the showerheads water, they cannot control the overall water flow and this will not bring any benifit to them. At first , they have to find out where most of the water is being used then they need to take behoove steps to check the water flow.
In addition to this, there is no enough information to differentiate the water flow of actual reading of water usage before and after the modification. For this reason, we cannot assure that will be benificial. For the reduction of water in each month, they have to know the readings of usage water. By controllinng the water flow, the water pressure has decreased so, it can need more water to complete any work. then the amount of usage water will be increased and it exacerbate the situation which may cause loss to them.
At the end, I think in the editorial there are lots of flaws so the decision of the corporation is not valid untill they elaborate the points which are described above.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 343 350
No. of Characters: 1582 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.304 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.612 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.462 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 88 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.593 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.395 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.395 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Water
water is an essential resource for living and...
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Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: from
...the society desires to earn more profit from from their investment as sunnyside corporati...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 438, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...vestment as sunnyside corporation wants.But it is not lucid that restriction of wat...
^^^
Line 1, column 595, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'corroborated'.
Suggestion: corroborated
...heir profits. For this reason, I am not corroborate with the conclusion that they have made...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 171, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...r is being used through the showeheads. it is possible, most houses use kitchen ta...
^^
Line 2, column 490, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... not bring any benifit to them. At first , they have to find out where most of the...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
...n need more water to complete any work. then the amount of usage water will be incre...
^^^^
Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'exacerbates'?
Suggestion: exacerbates
...of usage water will be increased and it exacerbate the situation which may cause loss to t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, so, then, third, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 342.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73391812865 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53354614895 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494152046784 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2388877913 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.1875 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1875 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388309305113 0.218282227539 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136596618252 0.0743258471296 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104382891634 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208345618937 0.128457276422 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123238037872 0.0628817314937 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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