Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
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The author (representative of Nature Way) claims that the launching new franchises in the towns of Planisville, where the author believes, inhabitant live healthful lives, would be profitable for the company. The author maintains so: the peoples, including school children, of Plainsville are disposed to health related exercises—such as weight training, aerobics and other fitness programs. While it is possible that given premises is valid, but seems incomplete; also, author’s argument depends upon the assumptions which may or may not be valid: the conclusion is dubitable and hence it should be re-examined.
Firstly, the author implies that the onset of the new franchise in the areas where residents follow healthy life is key for their store to thrive. The author fails to address, however, whether there are number of other stores who serves for the same purpose. Perhaps, there is likely to be number of stores of similar kind which may impede the development of the new franchise. Perhaps, people may be accustomed to buying the health related products in their old traders. Moreover, even if there are number of stores alike to them, the author fails to address, how distinctive are their stores in comparison to another stores. It is likely that other stores may be superior in terms of quality, business model, and a key factor: price of the products. If so, author’s proposal is not likely to prove efficacious.
Secondly, the author believes that the people of Plainsville inhabiting their healthy life are likely to buy health related products. The author assumes, then, the store will trun profitable. Despite the fact is likely to happen, the author fails to address various others factors—number of people’s, transportation cost, rental cost—conducive to profitability of the store. Let us assume that the community around which author proposes to open the store is likely to have less number of peoples in regard to other franchise communities. To add, the transportation cost and rental cost of Plainsville community is likely to be higher. All these three elements would add to decrease in profits despite constant revenue. If so, the assertion of the author that store will turn profitable is not likely to happen.
Finally, the author infers that school children, who are required to participate in the fitness-for-life programs, contribute as potential customers. Since, the good number of people involve in health related activities, as author assumes, it is likely that products bought by their parents would be enough for the children’s; perhaps, they will not require, gym products, energy drinks, and other wholesome foods commensurate to adults. If it is the case, it is not likely to make bigger impact on profit of store.
Nature Way has developed an interesting idea that may be worth further exploration ,but committing to such a plan immediately would be a rash. There are number of variables that the store committee needs to address and discuss in themselves. It is prudent to brainstorm the left behind factors and unwarranted assumptions before launching new franchise in Plainsville. If taken, it will surely prevent the franchise in becoming miserable fiasco.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 516 350
No. of Characters: 2612 1500
No. of Different Words: 238 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.766 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 216 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.226 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.708 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 83, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, such as, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2730.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 513.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3216374269 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02040351878 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485380116959 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 838.8 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1161494533 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.75 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29166666667 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27242225787 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828364129246 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453740823059 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167849893037 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323198383212 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 98.500998004 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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