"In order to stop the recent decline in our profits, we must reduce operating expenses at Movies Galore's ten movie-rental stores. Since we are famous for our special bargains, raising our rental prices is not a viable way to improve profits. La

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"In order to stop the recent decline in our profits, we must reduce operating expenses at Movies Galore's ten movie-rental stores. Since we are famous for our special bargains, raising our rental prices is not a viable way to improve profits. Last month our store in downtown Marston significantly decreased its operating expenses by closing at 6:00 P.M. rather than 9:00 P.M. and by reducing its stock by eliminating all movies released more than five years ago. By implementing similar changes in our other stores, Movies Galore can increase profits without jeopardizing our reputation for offering great movies at low prices."

In this argument the author urged to consider that with the reduction of operating cost, there wil be an increase in profit in the chains of movie rental stores. To support this recommendations, he states that one of their own rental store did that by closing the store early than expected and eliminating the older stocks. While some people agree to this propoganda, I find this argument unconvincing for some reasons.

First, the author talks about reducing the operating cost but he does not mention the nature of operations that needs to reduce. For instance, the employees working in the stores, Air conditioning cost or TV-Radio Electronics cost, all comes under the same roof. This assumption is unwarranted. If there will be the reduction in employees than the lesser number of employees will be there to engaged with the customers coming to the stores and to understand their requirements. If the air conditioning is switched off to some sections then not much customers will move along that shelfs of the movies which deprive of the AC. while the breif statement of reduction in operation cost seems to be a robust idea it deficit between what stated and what is there to evidence for it. This ultimately cause the week argument that will count against the author's conclusion.

Second, the author hypothesized that by reducing the older stocks of movies the operating cost can be reduced. This claim cannot be accepted as it stands. It is entirely possible that the retal stores high income is due to the fact that there comes the old movie lovers who rent the most. Also, as the stocks of the lastest movies takes time to relish therefore, many customers rental older movies. Perhaps, there some stores are located in the district where the older population is more then younger so renting the older movies makes sense. Therefore, this assumption is unwarranted and the argument lacks compelling and affluentreasons to to covince his proposal.

Third, the author posits that the store located in downtown Marston reducing its operating cost by closing the store earliar than usual. However, the author does not states the reason for that . it is possible that the merchants of downtown Marston closes their stores at 6pm. Perhaps, there is there the downfall of customers by already existing famous movie rental store in that area. Hence the author is flawed in a way that he fails to substantiate his conclusion with the strong evidence and is termed with poor reasonsing. The careful perusing of the evidence provide in the argument reveals that many questions have been left unanswered without which the reader cannot consider it to be consequential.

In conclusion, the is a vague and ambiguous argument. To bolster it, the author must at very least provide some concrete evidence, perhaps by the means of the survay in the various cities where this rental stored are situated to ensure whether there is the real nead for cutting down the store's operating cost

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, while, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2488.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 499.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98597194389 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60554485665 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478957915832 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3380487611 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.666666667 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7916666667 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.25449101796 571% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116250085252 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367671286282 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364039612984 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.07565244251 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01175850338 0.0628817314937 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2433 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.876 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.532 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 177 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.682 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.129 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.48 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5