Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The argument is trying to press that Pirouettes Ballet School is the most prestigious school in the whole town but provides little to no relevant evidence regarding it and with some unverified assumptions.
Firstly, self stating that the school is the clear choice for any child is quite a jump. The argument has given no relevant study or survey which can prove the statement to be sound. For it to be the choice of any child it has to be resonated by the child and not the school. An unbiased survey of children of the town can help check the truthfulness of the claim.
Secondly, the argument says that the Pirouettes Ballet School has the most intensive program among all the schools in Elmtown. The title of being the most intensive program does not translate to being the most chosen dancing school by the concerned children of the town. also, being most intensive also does not prove their teaching abilities.
And lastly, the argument states that their teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. The statement assumes that being a competent dancer is equal to being a good teacher but that may not necessarily be true. A person can excel individually and yet not be good at passing on their abilities to other students. The statement suggests that the teachers have been dancers at ballet companies but the dance program doesn't consist of only one form of dancing. The teachers need to be multidisciplined in terms of dance forms to justify their stand as good enough teachers to make the Institution the choice of the town.
These are some unclarified assumptions made by the argument which needs to be cleared for the claim to stand true.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 293 350
No. of Characters: 1374 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.137 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.689 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.534 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 88 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.033 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.625 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t and with some unverified assumptions. Firstly, self stating that the school is...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to dance'.
Suggestion: to dance
... not translate to being the most chosen dancing school by the concerned children of the...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
... by the concerned children of the town. also, being most intensive also does not pro...
^^^^
Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oes not prove their teaching abilities. And lastly, the argument states that the...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 451, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... ballet companies but the dance program doesnt consist of only one form of dancing. Th...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 292.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82191780822 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57235326376 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472602739726 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0177024743 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.571428571 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383985289496 0.218282227539 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145570367283 0.0743258471296 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136990392617 0.0701772020484 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194224406467 0.128457276422 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977014135212 0.0628817314937 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.3550499002 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 98.500998004 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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