A recent study reported that pet owners have longer, healthier lives on average than do people who own no pets. Specifically, dog owners tend to have a lower incidence of heart disease. In light of these findings, Sherwood Hospital should form a partnership with Sherwood Animal Shelter to institute an adopt-a-dog program.The program would encourage dog ownership for patients recovering from heart disease, which should reduce these patients' chance of experiencing continuing heart problems and also reduce their need for ongoing treatment. As a further benefit, the publicity about the program would encourage more people to adopt pets from the shelter. And that will reduce the incidence of heart disease in the general population.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author asserted that Sherwood Hospital suppose to establish a partnership with Sherwood Animal Shelter to develop an adopt-a-dog program, he based this strategy on several assumptions that are tenuous according to the evidences he offered.
First of all, he falsely assumed there is a positive relation between having a dog and the lower rate of develop heart disease. Even though the author cited a recent study reported that people who have pets is averagely healthier and have a longer live, due to the lack of detail information of the study, the assumption that having a pet will increase the health condition of one is unwarranted. There is possibility that the people who have pet normally eat healthier and work out their body more often compare with those who don’t have a pet, in this case, diet pattern and exercise is the key factor that impact one’s health instead of having pets. Thus, the assumption that introduce pet into patient’s life will sure decrease their heart disease development will not be established.
Secondly, the author made a assumption that introducing dog to heart disease patient will bring down the need of further medical treatment, however he failed to provide relative information to support this posit. There are people who us allergic to dog fur, if allergic triggered, it will sure put heavier pressure to the patients heart burden and their heart disease will be worse. Considering this situation, it would do more harm than good if the hospital adopted the author’s all-inclusive measurement.
Moreover, the author assumes that the program will promoted the reduction of incidence of heart disease in the general population. Even in the area that people will benefited from having pet in terms of their health. It doesn’t grant that this program is suitable for other areas, there are places where people living under poverty, it is difficult for them to maintain a family’s life, not to say to afford the money for keep a pet, some people are so sick due to severe heart problem that it would be a huge physical challenge for them to walk a dog, for them, it will not be appropriate to take the author’s advice.
To sum up, before implement the program, hospital need to prove that the assumption of the author is right in order to avoid the risk of waste hospital’s resources.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1895 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.785 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.537 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.618 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.645 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 27, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...tablished. Secondly, the author made a assumption that introducing dog to hear...
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Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...t will sure put heavier pressure to the patients heart burden and their heart disease wi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 52, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'promote'
Suggestion: promote
...he author assumes that the program will promoted the reduction of incidence of heart dis...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...tion. Even in the area that people will benefited from having pet in terms of their healt...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04568527919 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77954822316 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527918781726 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.305020856 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.666666667 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8333333333 23.324526521 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244056061282 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973956040031 0.0743258471296 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747199583843 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119284710733 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932282924651 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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