The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built.
The given argument clearly says that the author who wrote the letter to editor doesn't want the council to grant permission for road consutruction in West Lansburg. I would strongly condemn the author thoughts with proper reasons. Below is the justification for my opinion.
Firstly, it is mentioned that the governemt declared a wildlife sanctuary for tufted groundhog but the cause for this decisssion is not provided. May be its because of water pollution or it can be due to lack of food resourcess. Secondly there is no information regarding the current population count of these animals. If it is in few hundreds or thousands then we should think about the argument, otherwise we can simply discard it. It can be because of tsunami, the count has been drastically.So, the author should provide information for the prohibition of development in coastal area.
Secondly, the author cited the example of Eastern Carpeneria which had seen the decilne of sea otter population. The author no where mentioned the cause for the decline in count. He simply stated that decilne happened after the repeal of the sanctuary status in 1978. It might be a just coincidence. There is no data stating the previous and current count of otter sea animals. May be even after providing necessary resources, the government failed to maintain or improve the immunity of these animals.
Moreover the author compared the Lansburg issue with the Eatern Carpenteria which occured almost three decades ago. This is a huge difference. The climatic conditions may vary eventhough the places are nearby. If the government of Lansburg has a plan to build the roads with disturbing the biodiversity and environment then I think it should allow the plan even when there is a strong criticsm.
There are many flaws in the argument sated by author. I would suggest him to provide relevant data like statistics of the animals population in the past few year. I would recommend him to demonstrate the reason for the decline in otter population in 1978 by providing valid evidence. Without these things it is hard to judge whether the council should allow the roads to be built or not.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The given argument clearly says that the author who wrote the letter to editor doesn't want the council to grant permission for road consutruction in West Lansburg.
Error: consutruction Suggestion: construction
Sentence: Firstly, it is mentioned that the governemt declared a wildlife sanctuary for tufted groundhog but the cause for this decisssion is not provided.
Error: decisssion Suggestion: decision
Error: governemt Suggestion: government
Sentence: May be its because of water pollution or it can be due to lack of food resourcess.
Error: resourcess Suggestion: resources
Sentence: Secondly, the author cited the example of Eastern Carpeneria which had seen the decilne of sea otter population.
Error: decilne Suggestion: decline
Sentence: He simply stated that decilne happened after the repeal of the sanctuary status in 1978.
Error: decilne Suggestion: decline
Sentence: Moreover the author compared the Lansburg issue with the Eatern Carpenteria which occured almost three decades ago.
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The climatic conditions may vary eventhough the places are nearby.
Error: eventhough Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: If the government of Lansburg has a plan to build the roads with disturbing the biodiversity and environment then I think it should allow the plan even when there is a strong criticsm.
Error: criticsm Suggestion: critics
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samples:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/tufted-groundhog-l…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1759 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.859 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.677 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.005 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.263 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e author who wrote the letter to editor doesnt want the council to grant permission fo...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...this decisssion is not provided. May be its because of water pollution or it can b...
^^^
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n is not provided. May be its because of water pollution or it can be due to lack...
^^
Line 3, column 497, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...tsunami, the count has been drastically.So, the author should provide information ...
^^
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...lne of sea otter population. The author no where mentioned the cause for the decli...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...prove the immunity of these animals. Moreover the author compared the Lansburg issue ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...de relevant data like statistics of the animals population in the past few year. I woul...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 154, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun year seems to be countable; consider using: 'few years'.
Suggestion: few years
...s of the animals population in the past few year. I would recommend him to demonstrate t...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01111111111 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7716822008 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4711141131 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3636363636 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0745483557881 0.218282227539 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0180873851495 0.0743258471296 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399015464203 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0370650867843 0.128457276422 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371478805146 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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