"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
While it may be true that Adams Realty is more superior then Fitch Realty, this authors argument does not make a cogent case for using Adams Realty over another. In the argument, the author not only draws a conclusion based on a limited amount of information, but the author confuses the basic laws of supply and demand. In result, the author leaves us with an argument that is full of holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to convince someone that Adams realty is superior than Fitch.
Citing the number of real estate agents each company has, the author assumes that since Adams realty has more realtors than Fitch, it is thus superior. It is not clear however, why the number of realtors a certain company has makes a difference in that companies’ success. Some additional information is needed in order for this assumption to hold water. For example, one could add a on extra data to show that in general a correlation has been found between the number of realtors a company has and that company’s success. Furthermore, one could put together a survey that asks the residents of the town whether or not the number of realtors a company makes a difference when they decide to bring their business to that company. Unless more information can be added we cannot assume that the fact that Adam’s realty has more realtors will make it more successful.
Additionally, the author implies that since Adam’s realty succeeded in selling his house in a month while ten years before it took 4 months for Finch’s realty to sell a different home, then homes listed with Adams sell faster. While the authors own experience shows that Adams realtor was more successful selling one of his properties over Fitch, it cannot be assumed that this is means Adams realty is superior. Certain questions need to be asked regarding this assumption. For example, the author mentions that ten years have passed since he last sold a house. Perhaps in these ten years the realty market has changed and the demand for houses is much higher now than it was ten years ago. In such a case, it would be much harder to sell a house in a market where the demand is low and that could be the cause for it taking longer. Moreover, the author does not mention what price he got on each house, perhaps Fitch Realty took its time in finding a buyer who was willing to pay more compared with Adams who maybe rushed to sell at a lower price. All these holes in given information show that this assumption can prove the superiority of Adams over Fitch.
The argument could be strengthened if the author provided information regarding the supply and demand of houses in the last ten years. The argument could be further strengthened, if the author would supply data regarding correlation between the number of realtors a company has and that company’s success. As it stands, however, this author’s argument is not likely to significantly persuade someone to use Adam’s realty over Fitch.
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Essay evaluation report
minimum 3 arguments wanted. also need to argue:
Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 516 350
No. of Characters: 2399 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.766 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.649 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.369 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.109 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...true that Adams Realty is more superior then Fitch Realty, this authors argument doe...
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Line 1, column 488, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...e someone that Adams realty is superior than Fitch. Citing the number of real es...
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Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... hold water. For example, one could add a on extra data to show that in general a...
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Line 3, column 616, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...vey that asks the residents of the town whether or not the number of realtors a company makes ...
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Line 5, column 546, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'since the last'?
Suggestion: since the last
...hor mentions that ten years have passed since he last sold a house. Perhaps in these ten year...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, while, for example, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2495.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 516.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83527131783 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61999090697 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443798449612 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 768.6 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5938929209 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.75 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252383395725 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088968436779 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936972678861 0.0701772020484 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166563066893 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603059344954 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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