Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based
Success is dependent on many things such as hard work, patience, consistence practice, etc. It is also dependent upon inception of idea and its implementation. The claim stated here that those in power be it any field-business, education, politics, government-should retire directly after 5 years irrespective of your performance in that position. The reason to support that claim is given as that the path to success is dependent upon new leadership that brings in new ideas. I personally so not support the claim and its reason and my disagreement is based on 3 reasons.
A period of 5 years is given in any field so that a person may get sufficient time to get adjusted with the position and also to get himself or herself going in the respective field of work. Governments elections are held every 5 years. So people get the chance to see the government’s work and vote accordingly. In India general elections are held every 5 years and Prime Minister is elected each 5 years. All the decisions of the government are in the name of the Prime Minister. Lets assume for 5 years he has done fantastic work-no previous government could ever do. Now work is always visible if the policies that are governing this are perfectly implemented. And these policies take time to show results. Some policies even take 3 to 4 years to show its results. If after 5 years the Prime Minister Changes then the policies initiated remain as it is as the new government may change the policy as it has new outlook to things. This only hampers the overall growth of any organization. Thus if the person at helm if any organization is doing good then he or she should be given an extension to show their mettle.
Another view is that success is dependent on consistent hard work. Success is not guaranteed overnight, it requires patience. Jack Ma, CEO of Alibaba Group said in an interview that he had run the company at zero profit for 10 years. 10 years is a lot of time to invest in a company which is giving no profit. But he also said that every year I used to try something new so that the company makes gain. And today we see that Alibaba is one of the most desirable companies in the world. This is success! Had he resigned after 5 years, would Alibaba be what it is today? The answer is a clear no. Jack Ma give time and he coupled it with consistent hardwork. The result is epitome for any budding child to look upon. Thus time should not be a constraint if success is the final result. Also to not a point in this example is that newer ideas do help but that should not be hampered with time.
Path to success has many routes. There is no clear route that will guarantee success. 5 years to any organization is sufficient to show the desired outcome but that should not be the only criteria to dislodge someone who is trying hard to get success to the organization. Thus fresh ideas are necessary for institutions to progress but time should be given to such ideas to mature.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... are in the name of the Prime Minister. Lets assume for 5 years he has done fantasti...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...the overall growth of any organization. Thus if the person at helm if any organizati...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ome for any budding child to look upon. Thus time should not be a constraint if succ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...straint if success is the final result. Also to not a point in this example is that ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ard to get success to the organization. Thus fresh ideas are necessary for instituti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, look, may, so, then, thus, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.5258426966 195% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2454.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56983240223 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72642869685 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458100558659 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 767.7 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9552431079 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.3636363636 118.986275619 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2727272727 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.09090909091 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234336011067 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564551236234 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591730683532 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156723972624 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685306935205 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 14.1392134831 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.8420337079 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.