Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The writer of the issue states that headmen should be changed after five years in any field such as business, politics, education, and government since it is the most reliable way in order to become successful for any enterprise. In fact, I agree with neither the claim nor the reason as I found them both problematic.
First of all, changing the person who is on top is not beneficial in every field. It simply means there are some areas which seldom need these replacements mostly because regular substitution brings about staff’s confusion at lower level in that structure. In terms of sport, for instance, if the coach of a team will be changed after five years, the players probably cannot put up with the regular changes, so it is highly likely that they fail to show their highest potential. On top of that, if the person on top shows an acceptable performance, and they will be dismissed after a determined period, there would be almost no incentives for the rest of both probable future candidate to do their best as a leader.
Even if we assume that changing people in power is absolutely beneficial for each and every organization, it is specious to put a limitation of a five-year period mainly because this is a very restricted time in order to implement many policies. In this context, take the presidency as a vivid example; by and large, there are almost always many problems, especially at the end of the previous government, which should be tackled with the help of new people in power, so many of these problems cannot be resolve over the course of a five-year period. Thus, most presidents are recollecting for another equal period to overcome a myriad of hardships in either the society or the intergovernmental relationships. Besides, those effective leaders who are working efficiently should not be laid off; instead, they should be used for a much longer period in order to show their true potential.
As I already stated, I find the reason unconvincing too. In this respect, there is no guarantee that replacing the previous leader will lead to betterment in a company. It is possible that these changes bring deleterious ramifications and exacerbate the financial state of the structure, so it is erroneous to allege that these changes would always generate improvements. In addition, it is highly likely that changing the leader imposes a prodigious amount of money on establishments, engendering bankruptcy mainly as a result of higher salaries asked by new leaders. Indeed, changing the people in power is not the surest way to accomplish.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, by and large, first of all, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95391705069 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91335734914 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536866359447 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.4132262882 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.333333333 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9333333333 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.21951772744 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180063714982 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056951313221 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682188013479 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123903949825 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954706932253 0.0667264976115 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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