Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Culture such as music and art are commonly founded in cities and it was said that governments have a responsibility to fund their cities in order to maintain the city’s continued cultural growth and to preserve it. Money is also something that could help maintain the continuation and development of culture. I mostly agree with this claim and reason for two reasons of my own and disagree with them for one reason.
Firstly, increased government funding for cities could allow the city mayor to build an art museum which helps preserve works of art while also keeping them secure. To illustrate, a museum can keep gentle works of art hundreds of years old in thick glass casing from falling to dust and prevent art theives from taking it and selling it offshores through the blackmarket. Thus, if governments fund major cities to build these museums, major cultural assests such as art can be accumulated over time and safely preserved.
In addition, the government can fund public schools for art and music classes. For example, public schools can be given funds for art and music teachers to teach students about culture and cultural persuits. This means that these classes can shape young minds into both creators and preservers of culture. This is because many students at one time are taught culture to remember it and pass it down to the subsequent generations of students and will also use their education in art or music create new genres and new subjects for art.
Lastly, though the government may think that they will help support culture, the funds allotted to the cities may actually go somewhere else. The city mayor may just give himself and his closest aids a raise or the city could fund other things such as infrastructure. In any event, there are so many other things on the city’s agenda which does not revolve around art or its preservation. The city and the government of the nation are likely to have conflicting notions on how funding should be spent in a major city.
In conclusion, major cities can be representative of a nation’s best culture and funding could be a good way in order to preserve and to generate new culture. However, it may not be the best way since the cities may not be in agreement same terms as the government is in regards to how funding should be spent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 274, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...reement same terms as the government is in regards to how funding should be spent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 401.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81546134663 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60815931441 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498753117207 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7222131917 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.6875 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.21951772744 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230117228338 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876196774105 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695593677081 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144315350891 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602004411961 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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