Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reasons on which that claim is based.
This topic raises the controversial claim of whether authorities should invest in major cities to make sure that they thrive and the nation’s traditions are preserved. Indisputably, it is necessary to support major cities, not necessarily financially, around the country, but they have already thrived and by gaining more supports they become more urbanized. Big cities are representations of one country in front of the whole world. Nevertheless, the reason given by the author for the above claim is completely obsolete and does not hold true in today's world. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that to preserve traditions, major cities should be the first priority for governors and would argue that by addressing the rural area fundamentally, we reach to the better result regarding our aim.
First of all, the author’s assertation is not completely wrong but there should be more explanations especially, the reason for the claim does not hold true nowadays. According to this, the officials should be assured of allocating adequate budgets to their most populated cities but, it is not necessarily financial support that they may need. I would like to point out that by supporting, for instance, the universities and research institutes in even non-monetary ways it could make the students and others thrive better in competitions with other nations.
Furthermore, as mentioned before, the reason for the claim made by the author is not valid anymore in today’s world. The nation’s cultural traditions do not seem to be preserved and generated in its major cities anymore. For example, Bombay in India has been less modernized and urbanized than in other major cities in the world, such as Singapore, New York, etc. Also, Mumbai is a big metropolis where people from different classes and different faiths live. In this circumstance, obviously if one wants to look closely at the traditions of India, Mumbai will be the last priority. Both common sense and recent personal experiences have told us that the actual traditions and values of a country are generated and prevalent in the small towns and villages. Hence, all the evidence above demonstrates that governments should indeed ensure that these villages should receive enough financial supports to help them thrive.
Admittedly, modern cities have evolved and developed to provide the luxuries of life to people. This is true especially when it comes to adherence to traditions which in contrast, people have forgotten to preserve the basic traditions of the country, far yet to generate them. In addition, to have a stronger competitive advantage around the world, administrations could invest in the rural areas with the great potentiality to absorb the more tourists they have before and to introduce the deep and pure culture of their nations to the visitors.
In conclusion, although major cities play a pivotal role in economic growth, rural areas and small towns should not be neglected because of the cultural protection and tourism financial potentiality. In fact, both major cities and small towns should be regarded by officials based on their own needs and potentiality and international incomes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 201, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ion and tourism financial potentiality. In fact, both major cities and small towns...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 509.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31041257367 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93773804281 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522593320236 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 841.5 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1358066994 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.15 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.45 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 5.21951772744 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294865598424 0.243740707755 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087400709732 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595743632277 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165044015896 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405879159029 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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