Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Imagining the modern society without such structure as a government is almost impossible. Over thousand years of humanity history the government has been playing the crucial role in terms of defensive, supporting and coordinating functions. However, the population has grown at an unprecedented scale, so has the paucity of money which is urgent for mentioned above functionality. The claim linking necessity of financial support and the biggest cities plays on the assumption that the majority of population is concentrated in them, so does the reason which as well has added the aspect of saving and creating demotic customs. While one may be convinced that it is a undoubtful view, there is a huge number of evidence that this is not in fact a case.
The briefest reflection on structure of any current country reveals that indeed the huge number of populations has allocated in the central cities since the resources of making a living as well have concentrated there. One might ask question whether it has altered the dispersion of traditions by moving them from villages, remote places to these cities, megalopolises. Presumably modification has taken a place and the great variety of cultures inundated the cities. Inevitably the financial aid and support from government are essential there, so are they in the rest parts of a country. Thriving and burgeoning the whole country and generation is an ultimate goal of any society. So, is only keeping traditions and cultures urgent and requiring the financial support?
It should come as no surprise that the production of goods, developing the education system etc. – supporting all features of government as the alive creature – must be taken into consideration. Were not it for them, there would be left nothing for saving in term of cultural traditions. Consequently, the reason of budgeting inflows can be supplemented by the other points – supporting for developing productivity and growing the new educated population. Again, there is the geographic factor since there a tremendous need for covering the whole country, not just the major cities. For instance, the agriculture industry is a lucid characteristic of the country side and an excellent sphere for inflowing the financial aid. Having analyzed all aspects of a country as whole, one might point up the importance of geographical and directional allocation of a country budget.
In conclusion, there is a need to looking back at the claim and the reason in support of it. Undoubtedly, there has been put forward the grain of common sense – culture, traditions, customs are important for comprehending who we are. However, it is still the one side of the versatile task that must be considered wisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 667, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
.... While one may be convinced that it is a undoubtful view, there is a huge number...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, look, may, so, still, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2297.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18510158014 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01199222819 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541760722348 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0293602162 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.380952381 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0952380952 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183755772592 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517351602361 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509759826743 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108043124496 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296815437773 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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