Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study in which jobs are plentiful.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The purpose of education is to make individuals competent so that they can go ahead and live a successful life. Institutes play a major role in the process as they not only provide the textbook education but also affect in how students develop their understanding of the world. What students are taught in their schools hugely affects how they think about their career or their life. I believe, if institutions focus merely on job security, they will cause students to be narrow-minded and will cause the students to lack the inspiration to be truly successful in life.
In this competitive world, in order to be standout, one needs hard work is the only path to success. In order for a person to continue working hard, one needs a true inspiration, which I believe money cannot provide. Therefore, one can never do well even on a well-paid job if the job is not something he/she loves. If institutions encourage students to choose jobs of specific field, it is more than likely that students will end up choosing jobs that they feel were never made for them. Hence, they lack the necessary inspiration to do the job.
Also in this demanding world, inspiration is merely not enough. One needs talent in order to succeed. Talent is something inborn, something shaped by nature and nurture. If one individual is extremely talented in one field, it is unlikely that he/she will be equally talented in another field. When people are encouraged to follow their talent, it is sure that they will outclass people with less talent on the same field. For example, if I have a great talent for physics, I will surely surpass people who do not have much talent for physics but are merely trying to get in because physics is lucrative. In this case, even when the job security for physics may be less, I will still get a good job because I would have surpassed others because of my talent.
Hence, even when people say that money is really important in life and a secure job option is necessary to ensure a quality life with strong finances, I happen to disagree with it. Although I tend to agree with the first part of their statement, I believe that inspiration and talent is vital in having a financially sound career. And, talent is utilized and inspiration comes only when students are allowed to pursue the career they are interested in pursuing. Hence, I strongly believe they should be allowed to choose their career and the institutions should not interfere in this process.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...provide the textbook education but also affect in how students develop their understandin...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.210970464135 0.240241500013 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.191983122363 0.157235817809 122% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0632911392405 0.0880659088768 72% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0759493670886 0.0497285424764 153% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0675105485232 0.0444667217837 152% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.116033755274 0.12292977631 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0295358649789 0.0406280797675 73% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59002144556 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.035864978903 0.030933414821 116% => OK
Particles: 0.00210970464135 0.0016655270985 127% => OK
Determiners: 0.0632911392405 0.0997080785238 63% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0295358649789 0.0249443105267 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0189873417722 0.0148568991511 128% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2482.0 2732.02544248 91% => OK
No of words: 431.0 452.878318584 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75870069606 6.0361032391 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.350348027842 0.366273622748 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.22505800464 0.280924506359 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.162412993039 0.200843997647 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0974477958237 0.132149295362 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59002144556 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 219.290929204 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4686774942 0.48968727796 96% => OK
Word variations: 51.5295181708 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.55 23.380412469 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7334470877 59.4972553346 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.1 141.124799967 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.55 23.380412469 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.674092028746 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 44.055800464 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.06289308176 1.64882698954 64% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332020070857 0.391690518653 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135423465115 0.123202303941 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0856285950188 0.077325440228 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.489931079364 0.547984918172 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.10280818407 0.149214159877 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131223168269 0.161403998019 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620765939695 0.0892212321368 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.360527779891 0.385218514788 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00847979866924 0.0692045440612 12% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242617602474 0.275328986314 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606774905732 0.0653680567796 93% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 7.22455752212 180% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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