Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Dreams give us a drive. Every individual has his own set of goals to achieve in life time. I think young people should have complete freedom to follow their dreams because forcing them to some other path would be affect their life in many levels. It totally depends on a person to choose his goals and pursue it. I think people should advice young people on following their dreams rather than making them choose alternatives depending on their perspective.
The education plays a very important role in helping a person to grow and choose his path for life. Hence, the basic education should include all the academic disciplines as well as other activities so that a child knows his interests and then follow them in their later stages of life. Parents usually tend to force their children to excel in his or her academic and ignore extra curricular activities and their hobbies. This is completely wrong because every child has his own interests and parents should advice or encourage them to follow their dreams. Instead, parents believe picking professions which have great carrier, money which would lead them to success. Such point of views will have adverse effects on a healthy child's mind.
As we all agree with the point that we all have equal capabilities to pursue any goals in life. People should advice their young generation to try all the options available for them and let them decide their set of goals. Our elders will obviously have more knowledge than us and hence taking an advice from them will be beneficial for life decisions but at the end of the day decision should be left on us to make. If a child want to pursue his passion of music and not academics then he should be allowed to do so and not only allowed but also should get complete moral support from his parents. Instead forcing him to pick some other professions like becoming an engineer, doctor or a scientists which might be easy to achieve and have easy ways to success might lead him to depression. We see hundreds of students suicide because of failing in exams, due to force of their parents against their wishes etc.All this makes us realize that young people should be allowed to follow their dreams.
Hence, I would conclude saying, young people are the future of our country. Every person is different but with equal potential and has capabilities to take his decisions for life. Therefore, every individual should be encouraged to follow his dreams and our elder generation should support them with all their hearts and advice them whenever necessary. Forcing them would always lead to chaos which would hinder their growth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
... has his own set of goals to achieve in life time. I think young people should have compl...
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Line 1, column 336, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'advise' (a verb)?
Suggestion: advise
...ls and pursue it. I think people should advice young people on following their dreams ...
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Line 4, column 509, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'advise' (a verb)?
Suggestion: advise
...as his own interests and parents should advice or encourage them to follow their dream...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...effects on a healthy childs mind. As we all agree with the point that we all...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'advise' (a verb)?
Suggestion: advise
...pursue any goals in life. People should advice their young generation to try all the o...
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Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
...more knowledge than us and hence taking an advice from them will be beneficial for life d...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...omplete moral support from his parents. Instead forcing him to pick some other professi...
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Line 7, column 687, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a scientist' or simply 'scientists'?
Suggestion: a scientist; scientists
...ns like becoming an engineer, doctor or a scientists which might be easy to achieve and have...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: All
... their parents against their wishes etc.All this makes us realize that young people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, then, therefore, well, i think, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 452.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84734513274 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35079775776 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462389380531 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 664.2 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.611633198 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.333333333 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5238095238 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159719533596 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532501613519 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552200699623 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114561538573 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382348888727 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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