It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.

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It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.

Stating that it is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves, this view asserts that our identity are largely affected by a society which we are included. In some senses it is true that people have tendency to look other people or themselves through filtered view by groups in which they or themselves live. In my point of view, however, considering that there are many natures of a people which are inherent in the person and there are many things we cannot seemingly know because they are hidden, it is not proper that considering traits of groups in which a people are included is not proper if we want to exactly know a person.

Of course, few would disagree that many parts of our characteristics, behaviors, habits are affected by near people who are in same group. Considering that there are preference of corporations for specific schools, it seems reasonable that we can evaluate a person with his/her social groups. For example, many personnel directors of corporations want to choose suitable people for their company and they tend to hire people who graduate high-level schools such MIT, Harvard univ., or Seoul Nat. Univ. in Korea. When they asked why they prefer candidates who come from those schools, they answers say that the people who graduate high-level schools tend to be more hardworking and skillful than other people. This examples shows that what we are can be decided by our groups.

However, can we always say that one's social group is proper indicator of a person? My answer is no. When it comes to talents which are given by god, the talents could not be a result of socialization. For example, at that time of Van Gogh, many artists are supported by the noble and included in artists community. Although Van Gogh didn't, can we say that he was not even artists and had no a drop of talents for art? This example shows that being included in a group is not only cause of our identification.

Moreover, considering that people have their own figures which cannot be seemingly expressed, seeing group in which he /she is included can be an obstacle to exactly analyze a person. In my experience, I met a person when I was in army. He was a student of, so-called, low-level of university, so I thought he would have little common sense and low degree of knowledge of his major. But I was surprised at he had large professional experiences. This shows that what we can see through his external background is only partial part of him

To summarize, many people would think that people are tailored according to his background and group. However, considering that examples of Van Gogh and my experience, we cannot say our identity can be fully revealed by our group in which we are included. Only calcified people would asserts that the only thing we need to see when we know a person each other is his group not himself

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...are many things we cannot seemingly know because they are hidden, it is not prope...
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...MIT, Harvard univ., or Seoul Nat. Univ. in Korea. When they asked why they prefer ...
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...dates who come from those schools, they answers say that the people who graduate high-l...
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...in artists community. Although Van Gogh didnt, can we say that he was not even artist...
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...ay that he was not even artists and had no a drop of talents for art? This example...
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...e included. Only calcified people would asserts that the only thing we need to see when...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, moreover, so, for example, of course, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 36.0 11.3162921348 318% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 83.0 33.0505617978 251% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 503.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76143141153 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66149698426 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433399602386 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 741.6 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.2587308183 60.3974514979 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.047619048 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9523809524 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2704239076 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847598047597 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13401771704 0.0758088955206 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159722444347 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104819640516 0.0667264976115 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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