The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this argument, the faculty committee of seatown university claims that the school has to institute a free-tuition policy for its professors to hire new professors and give encouragement to original faculties. To justify their argument, they cite a study which was conducted in a nearby university, Oceania university, which indicated that faculty retention is high in the school when professors are given free tuition at the university for their college-aged children. careful scrutiny reveals that this argument has several logical flaws.
First, based on the study, the author reason that the reason of high retention in another school is the policy. However, that could not be true. For example, the wage of oceanic University's professors could be higher than average or newly constructed buildings and income facilities could be acted as attractiveness. if this is true, we cannot be convinced by this argument.
Second, based only the study, they think the only option for raising the rate of retention in Seatown university is the policy. Common sense tells us that there are many things to attract high quality professors to a school. For example, funding their researches with their budget or constructing new buildings which are specified in a specific field or high wage. Until she shows there is no way to attract future professors, this argument is not proper
Finally, even if other problems are true, there is another problem. The author thinks the situation of the two schools are similar and the trait of faculties of the two schools are similar. if the state of the budget is Seatown schools is worse than oceanic university, the policy could lead the school to bankrupt or if professors of the school or future professors don't have interest in free-tuition, the policy will be not effective. if they cannot explain why they think the situations of the two schools are similar, this argument is not cogent.
careful scrutiny reveals that this argument is still dubious as it stands. To make this argument more persuasive, the faculty committee of the Seatown university have to explain that there are no alternative options for the purpose and why they think there is causality between the policy and high retention in oceanic university. To make better, we have to know why the authors think that the two universities are in similar situations.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1938 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.982 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.663 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.807 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Careful
...ersity for their college-aged children. careful scrutiny reveals that this argument has...
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Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ities could be acted as attractiveness. if this is true, we cannot be convinced by...
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Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... professors, this argument is not proper Finally, even if other problems are true...
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Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...culties of the two schools are similar. if the state of the budget is Seatown scho...
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Line 7, column 368, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...sors of the school or future professors dont have interest in free-tuition, the poli...
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Line 7, column 438, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...tion, the policy will be not effective. if they cannot explain why they think the ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Careful
...imilar, this argument is not cogent. careful scrutiny reveals that this argument is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, so, still, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12886597938 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75129801539 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44587628866 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7410600085 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.058823529 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8235294118 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252290517965 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758225373235 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985120052929 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150337403939 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113512012002 0.0628817314937 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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