The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Many people are there who lives their life with luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life; they are indulged in wealthy life, they live the life with full of comfort. I agree with the above allegation that the people who lives in luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into strong and independent individuals because they are cosseted in the comfort zone and they rarely know the adversaries.
First and foremost, the luxurious people are indulged in comfort, they are cosseted in different gadget or machine, which will help them to ease their work. For instance, a wealthy man owns a car and he/she is inherently dependent on it, such people hardly want to travel in the public vehicle. However, there are people who travel in public vehicle and they are used to it or there are used to struggle and which makes them independent and strong. The wealthy people, in spite of living the life with full of easiness they are making them dependent to the machines.
Secondly, the sybarite people are hardly familiar with the adversary situation. In fact, if they are confronted to such hardship it’s harsh for there to tackle with such situations. In spite of not used to with the paucity, if they are affronted in some situation of not having or something or losing some it is hard for them, as compared to the no luxurious people because they are used to it, making them more independent and strong. For instance, if a business man is business go in vain and he becomes bankrupt then it will be very incomprehensible for him to recover or avert from such situations.
Finally, the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life makes people lazy, they are less active as compared to the no luxurious people, they are less likely to do work. For instance, a laborious worker works on sunny day for the earing and everyday working makes him independent he can life his life or find a way of living, and those people are active and physically fit and strong. But, those luxurious people less likely to independent and are physically weaker.
To sum up, the people who are indulges in luxuries are less likely to know the real struggle of life or hardship, they are unknown about those hurdles, so if they are confronted in such situation it will be very hard for them to deal with it , making them less independent and weak.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in fact, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80975609756 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64077149415 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.40243902439 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.5910357408 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.857142857 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2857142857 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298581232182 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122373235682 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109563704912 0.0758088955206 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190250679329 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120985908257 0.0667264976115 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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