The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people
from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Nowadays, living in a new era and its effects has gotten important. Regard this fact, there is a controversial question expressing whether these changes influence people and don't let them be strong enough. I am afraid, I disagree with preventing people to be strong by new things in a temporary life. The reasons to substantiate my idea is explored in the following.
To begin with, new things aren't necessarily harmful to enhance the human's power or his mind. To put on the other hand, people's minds and power don't need to do some unimportant works and can concentrate on innovation and hard job. Surely, the calculator makes our life easier, because no one needs to know all the mathematical issues. Hence, that person just thinks about his purpose. To easily perceive my words, consider computers which are inventing to help people to reach their goals in something like writing, sending Email and modeling new things, easily. If the computer never invented, we would be weaker than now.
Furthermore, new technology not only has effects on mind and power but also influence the dependency of human. To be specific, in the past, everyone needs a lot of things to build a house, but now, with the help of some technology like Google, they can prepare a lot of material without the need for others. Under such a circumstance, people either can rely on new technology or use the past's achievements. Let's consider an example to drive this fact home, in the past for sending a letter you need a man who travels and transmit your letter but now you can use Gmail.
Without any shadow of a doubt, technology has its negative effects. It is crystal clear, in the temporary life people are lazier and not trying to do hard work. However, it is not common all over the world and we should limit ourselves from doing these kinds of works. For example, encouraging and start to exercise every day can be one of the best jobs for preventing indolent in the life or sometimes we can do our job without the help of technology also living one day without technology is a good suggestion for taking care of our life.
In conclusion, I do believe new things in our life make us stronger than before and let us innovating and having a simple life. However, technology has bad effects like being indolent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, i am afraid, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 419.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78997613365 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67764262952 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55369928401 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.5954913874 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5714285714 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228556889284 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795660189577 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.210825345045 0.0758088955206 278% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21390148868 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.234520701523 0.0667264976115 351% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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