People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
A person's behavior comprises of a large number of characterstics, and thus a generalization of what determines the ones behavior is difficult to ascertain. Taking this notion forward it can be argued that given large number of characterstics determining the prople's behavior, its fallacious to assume that external forces can influence them.
Though not completley but to a lrge extent the people's behavior is determined by the forces. One of the most common example comes from the era prior to second world war. The political influence of Hitler led to common hatred towards Jews. The support or silence towards the kind of crime againist the humanity in the era is one of the unprecedented in histroy. It deviates from the normal discourse of people's behavior of intolerance for inhumanity.
It can be contended that these are exceptions, but the revolutions across the time-line and globe are great examples. Besides, the rise of feeling of nationlism at several desperate times upon call by national leadser shows how the forces affect the perople's behavior.
The examples can be contested by stating that these are prior to the internet era, and with the access to widely available informations, it is now ones own making. While the truth is completely opposite of it. In today's world the one's behavior is largely determined by big technological giants, which shape the thinking process of everyone. The big-data avaiable with these tech giants make it much easier for them to profile anyone, and present them with the information accordingly and bias them. This is not limited to commericial space, but the recent news about the Cambridge Analytica's role in U.S federal election shows the ability of these tech giants to shape political opinion of everyone. The ability to change the political opinion reflects their ability to greatly influence peple's behavior, because the political opinion of one depends on their thought process and ideology, and the ability to modify the ideology implies the ability to modify the one's behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 3, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
A persons behavior comprises of a large number of...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
A persons behavior comprises of a large number of characterstics, and t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
A persons behavior comprises of a large number of characterstics, and thus a generalizati...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...not completley but to a lrge extent the peoples behavior is determined by the forces. O...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 165, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nformations, it is now ones own making. While the truth is completely opposite of it....
^^^^^
Line 13, column 603, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
...bout the Cambridge Analyticas role in U.S federal election shows the ability of t...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, if, second, so, thus, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 331.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22054380665 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81011918537 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540785498489 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2548299758 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.2 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258708914171 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762535983439 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793049449389 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140627047047 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626689273238 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.