People's behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
The author of this letter contends that population of balmer island increases to about 0.1 million and because of this proliferation of population there might be a surge of accidents. hence, to reduce accidents the author proposed to reduce renting mopeds to 30 from 50. there are few flaws in his argument and due to this reason I disagree to his contention.
The first and foremost reason which I think weakens the argument is the author's unwarranted assumption that this scheme of limiting rental moped can reduce the number of accidents just like torseau island. there is no surety that this will also work for balmer if it worked for torseau island. hence, to evaluate this matter more evidence is needed. like the similarity between both the islands and many other factors.
Secondly, the author rules out any other possibility of accidents and establishes a direct relation between number of accidents and number of mopeds. there might be a case where due to stormy weather people are not able to control mopeds and are getting involved in accidents. hence, there can be multiple reason for moped accidents and one cannot simply rule out other possibilities.
there is no evidence that people who are coming at balmer island take this many mopeds. there might be a case where poeple are just coming to sit back and relax. To decrease the renting limit might not be that efficient as there is no evidence that all or most of the people indulge in renting mopeds. The projected number is just the renting limit of six companies. Its not an emperical data. also, there might be a case where people due to this increase in accidents might now avoid moped and choose to take a walk or rent a car.
Additionally, the author have ruled out the case where pedastrian might be the reason for these accidents. like pedestrians might not follow traffic rules and ramble around without any precaution and gets involved in accidents with moped drivers. there can also be other way around, like number of mopeds or pedestrian might not be the reason. The reason could be mopeds not following traffic rules and breaking the threshold speed limit and getting involved in accidents.
In sum, due to the aforementioned points author's contention is baseless and require further analysis. also, to grant this proposal author should provide more evidence. The author also makes too many unwarranted assumption which weakens his contention.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 409.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00244498778 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53404081587 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437652811736 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 643.5 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9731804024 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9565217391 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7826086957 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.30434782609 5.21951772744 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0216960051209 0.243740707755 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00786139347447 0.0831039109588 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0172450780146 0.0758088955206 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0116637046568 0.150359130593 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018130984869 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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