Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented
The role of the corporates in the society which they serve is like a coin having two sides. When talking about the well being of society and environment, the effort should be a collective one where not only the corporates but also the citizens are equally responsible. But considering that corporates doesn't indulge in activities which harms or disturbs the harmony of the society.
Although we are considering here corporates and citizens as a two different subjects, but in reality they are one and the same. If a corporation has goals which does not match with the social well being of the society it can be accepted as long as they operate in a environment friendly manner. Non co-operation of the corporates for a environment friendly society would result in adverse effects because when considering corporations they are large in number. So a small step by them brings about a drastic change whether it is positive or negative.
However, such negative actions are already covered under the law and prohibited. So in a way we can also agree to an idea of following the law is enough for corporations. If we consider that they not only follow the law but take considerable measures to improve the environment, it might indirectly cost the employees of the corporation. These employees would then turn to cheap products for their personal use which are not eco-friendly like usage of plastic bags instead of cloth bags. So instead of actually investing for the well being of environment, small steps and regulations can be employed which are not covered by the law but are a collective effort of all the employees. Best example to support this statement would be banning the usage of plastic cups for beverages and carrying our own mug. In this way, usage of plastic ups would be reduced by a great number only by following a small initiative.
So when it comes to responsibilities of corporations, money making should be their priority because even that would help in progress of the economy and indirectly helping the society but all this should not be done at the cost of well being of the environment. They should abide the law and if possible should take small steps towards saving our green planet. On the other hand, the employees of the corporation have a responsibility as a citizen to save our nature.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: doesn't
...nsible. But considering that corporates doesnt indulge in activities which harms or di...
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...t in reality they are one and the same. If a corporation has goals which does not ...
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Suggestion: an
... be accepted as long as they operate in a environment friendly manner. Non co-ope...
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Suggestion: an
... Non co-operation of the corporates for a environment friendly society would resu...
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Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: large
... when considering corporations they are large in number. So a small step by them brings about a...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Best'.
Suggestion: The Best
...collective effort of all the employees. Best example to support this statement would...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, then, well, talking about, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 397.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85390428212 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8592760488 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476070528967 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5504154275 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.352941176 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3529411765 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304949075612 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098987192378 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691297191546 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199662254548 0.150359130593 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463953537848 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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