all university students required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is
In the university the students should take some necessary and unnecessary courses to graduate. There also have been two contrasting attitudes toward this; while some believe that taking unnecessary and irrelevant courses like history courses for an engineer student has many disadvantages, others adhere to the idea that it may have some beneficial impact on their social life. To some extent, I support the former perspective. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
To begin with, it is obvious that taking inconvenient courses wastes their time during the university. They should study the historical events instead on spending time on searching about their special major so they cannot become an expert in their major during this period. To shed light on this matter, I want to bring up an example of an activity in which I was involved. In the second year of bachelor studies at university, our teacher gave us an assignment to search about the social changes during the renaissance. Our principle major was civil engineering and we should do many researches related to our necessary courses too, like concrete and steel projects. During that term we could not get good grades because we spend much time doing history assignment that we did not have enough knowledge about, finally we could not complete our essential projects. This example aptly illuminates how important and beneficial is to spend time on courses that are related to our major.
Second, financial funds play an important role in increasing their incentive during a special semester. They have many costs like paying for dorm, library, food and other crucial materials. These funds associated to their principle courses not to their unnecessary courses so they force to spend all the cost of these courses themselves without the aid of university. In their attitudes, taking extra courses wastes their money because they cannot use them in their future job but they are forced to take them to graduate. For example, they should buy history books which do not be used after they pass this course. Furthermore, they can save their money for improving their personal skills that is convenient for their future job.
In brief, based on the aforementioned reasons, one can logically draw the conclusion that by taking history courses which is not related to their major field they waste their time and money just to pass them because these coerce is essential for graduation. All in all, is highly recommended that irrelevant courses should replace by convenient courses for students to improve their knowledge and skill in their interested major.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'spending'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: spending
...their unnecessary courses so they force to spend all the cost of these courses themselve...
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Suggestion:
...ge and skill in their interested major.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, second, so, while, for example, in brief, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13752913753 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62182744811 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498834498834 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.594652498 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5789473684 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10526315789 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296378651471 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941154242835 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772071498921 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197170882064 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614113774518 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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