Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, the advertisement industry plays a major and complementary role in selling products. That's why I think it is common usual and believable that they use some exaggeration's techniques in order to sell more products. I subscribe to this view that advertisements make products seem much better then they really are. I can express numerous reasons why I share the opinion with this idea, but here I will develop only two significant factors.
First, using some exaggeration's technique would be useful for the companies so as to sell more goods. To be more specific, as the companies varieties expand all over the world, each one of them need to amplify its own product, not just stick to primary qualities. Therefore, firms would be hopeful to have the opportunity to compete with other companies, and survive in the highly competitive market. This technique would be much more promising for the new-emerge incorporation. For instance, I can name a Chinese firm called Hoawei. When this company had started to produce mobile phone's, they used to exhibit their product much more qualified than they were. By exerting this policy, they would be able to attract huge amount number of costumer in the short time. Also, they got the chance to rival with super companies such as Apple and Samsung. Therefore, in some cases using exaggeration can be useful not only for the firms, but also consumers would be profitable either.
Moreover, developing computers and editing programs, and using celebrities in the advertisements has pivotal impact on the advertising industry. By exerting countless effects on motion pictures, main stream companies able to amplifies their products quality. They also use celebrities to their advertisements in order to impose public that this particular commodity is unique. Hence, most of people encourage to purchase this product. The new studies also approved the positive impact of using famous persons on costumers desire for obtaining the new product.
Consequently, most of firms apply exaggeration techniques, and exert motion pictures effect alongside using well-known characters to sell their products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'better than'?
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'exaggerations'' or 'exaggeration's'?
Suggestion: exaggerations'; exaggeration's
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...nique would be useful for the companies so as to sell more goods. To be more specific, a...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... particular commodity is unique. Hence, most of people encourage to purchase this product. The...
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Message: Did you mean 'purchasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: purchasing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for instance, i think, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35103244838 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89445324251 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592920353982 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9434447102 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.4736842105 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8421052632 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150021877194 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560741029451 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847433351028 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099352549489 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710677364097 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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