Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over the last decades, technology has played an important role in our life. Some people said that young generation is less creative than they were in the past . In the opposite side , some people believed that young people are more creative than in the past. From my perspective, I am better convinced by the latter for the following reason.
First idea come out of my mind is the effect of technology to creativity of young human. When people use internet to watch a video of an equipment , a theory or a phenomenon, they can creative others use of thing in that video. Moreover , they can creative some new variants of that thing. Like in the past, a car have only two pistons engine and four wood wheels, now , we have a lot of car with six pistons or eight pistons engine and all car wheels have rubber tire cover they. In addition, technology also help young generation more creative in science. By using technology, students who do research about science like biology, physic, chemistry can creative new things. Hence, technology has made young generation nowadays more creative than they were in the past.
Secondly, we are living in technology era, countries around the world are developing their technology with rapid speed. Therefore, a lot of companies have replaced their employees by automatic robots. If young people do not creative in their work, they will be replace by robots. Take my friend, Ho Duc Hieu, as an example. The company which he work for has fired two thousands employees and replaced by five hundred robots that make quantity of company grow up.
In conclusion , the effect of technology and request for creation in work are my reason for my opinion. It is highly recommended people should carefully consider my writing .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86287625418 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56409985311 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571906354515 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.221153829 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7777777778 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6111111111 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219308139276 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746238652443 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725636332547 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124466086171 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680572218433 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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