Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with the statement about Tecnhology has made children less creative than they were in the past. There are 2 reasons to support my opinion and personal examples to affirms my point of view.
First of all, I believe that Tecnhology have affeted much the children’s life. Some people could desagree with me, but In my mind, books contribue more to learn and creative of children than tecnhology. For example, I consider that my sister was a child (and young) much intelligent. She only winned a cellphone when she was 12 years old. Rather than she has a cellphone like all her friends, my mother gave history’s books, Science’s books, and other. I consider that this may of learn did she more intelligent and creative than other children of same age that had a cellphone to call and to talk.
In the second place, In my personal opinion, the tecnhology show of children a big world where It is more play less mind. Of course, I agree that in a internet has an educative plays, but is not much considering the other plays and respectives futilities. I have another example in my family with my cousin. All time I go to his home, he is playing or watching television, he does not mind about otheer things if not players and series. In my point of view, he do not train his mind, he does not limit over technology, like many children nowdays. The children do not live the day-of-day, do not live of life, do not live commum plays that contribue to education and creative of children like in the past time, like the adults lived.
In conclusion, there are my reasons to support my discuss about the statement “Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past”. I agree that technology could contribue to learn of children and infinites things, even though, I mind that on begin of life of a children, the technology can do bad.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ching television, he does not mind about otheer things if not players and series....
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Suggestion: does
...ers and series. In my point of view, he do not train his mind, he does not limit o...
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Suggestion: a child; children
...though, I mind that on begin of life of a children, the technology can do bad.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, for example, in conclusion, of course, first of all, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67469879518 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7502292756 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493975903614 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0935788749 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290072537913 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106457653751 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129150876577 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249586543383 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14372866079 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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