If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
In the last 10 years my hometown is continuously developing because of the establishment of large companies in nearby areas. It is a good thing and due to this so many people are migrating in our town for jobs. The population increases rapidly with time and traffic becomes one of the major problems for residence. I would like to change the traffic system of my hometown and make it better for all. There are following reasons to support my idea.
Firstly, in the present situation there are no traffic lights, barriers, dividers, road safety signs, or specific instructions, so people drive according to their convenience. It was okay 10 years earlier because there were not many vehicles but now it becomes inconvenient for all of us. Few days ago I saw an ambulance stuck in the middle of the road because some people blocked the road from driving on the wrong side.
Secondly, in the last few years an increase in road accidents were reported by authorities as the report published in our hometowns local news paper. The old traffic system is still working which is not sufficient for today's situation. For example, last month a truck entered downtown for supply of material and it collided with a car coming from the opposite side. As traffic increases in downtown the entry of heavy trucks should be banned by the traffic department or they could make proper driving lanes for vehicles.
Thirdly, children below 18 years are prohibited to drive motorbikes and cars but there are children who ride motorbikes rushly. These children are in adolescence and they ride at high speed to enjoy the adrenaline effect. This is harmful because sometimes they harm themselves or others by riding high speed motorbikes.
Finally, My hometown is very beautiful but the traffic jams and no traffic instructions makes it disorganized. If the traffic system improved then it would become an ideal town.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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...report published in our hometowns local news paper. The old traffic system is still workin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95625 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67931165367 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56875 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9844252756 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2941176471 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0695240396549 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0267667682557 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365874994217 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0395056857463 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04419377993 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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