Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, due to the hustle and bustle of the big cities, people seek activities to escape from the hectic lifestyle. Travelling is one one of the promising avenue to reach this goal. In this regard, some might choose to spend their vacation in nature, while others prefer to travel to histprica places. I am inclined to the believe that visiting euseum could make the trip more exciting. I cling to this standpoint for two main reasons, which I will elucidate in the following essay.
To begin with, museums provide an opportunity for people to gain an insight into the history of the places they visit. In fact, people have a tendency toward the people in the past, their lifestyle and their behavior. Hence, museum is a place where you can find all kind of monuments belong to the ancient people. For a tangible example, whenever I travel to Shiraz, and historic city in my country, I become impressed by the devices the ancient Iranian were using in search of food or a shelter to survive. And also, these places hire guide men who explain the trend of change in people’s lifestyle from the ancient time to today. These experience never gets old to me, and I think I need to visit some times again to discover new things about people in the past. Actually, I feel I find myself there among all those antiques.
Second, It is far more exciting to visit the musumes rather than going some recreational resorts since these facilities could be found in the city woud live, but some antique and monuments are just in specific museum, and you cannot foind them anywhere in the world. An experience of mine is a compelling example of this. Las summer, My friends and I traveled to Zanjan, a northern city in Iran. After visiting the traditional bazar, we went to visit the saltmen in the cultural center of the city. It was so amazing and the beauty was beyond the comprehension. These saltmen, are the ones who worked in the mine about 2500 years ago, and after an earthquack underground, these men were enclose there. Also, since salt prevent the demisal from decaying, theose men were remained unchanged with all their belongings after 2500 years. I was shocked by their posture the last moment of their lives. It was like they want to scape. This memory has remained in my mind until now, while I barely remember the other parts of the city we visit.
To put all in a nutshell, considering all the aforementioned points and examples, I believe that people may visit museum because not only does it give people an insight about the people in the past and satisfy their curiosity, but it also makes the trip very exciting.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, if, may, second, so, while, i feel, i think, in fact, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6724137931 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44809372805 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558189655172 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6936875678 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2608695652 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1739130435 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52173913043 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255136333173 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608893954354 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562253722561 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154201340419 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551874841162 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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