Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?
In the current generation, everyone in the society working hard in a different sectors to earn money to support they family however, few are still are depend on other. So there has been no shortage of debate about whether or not people can offer currency to mendicant. Some people believe it is absolutely acceptable idea to donate money to the homeless people. On the other Hand, I personally feel people shouldn’t support bum for reasons I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, even though it is a good idea to support the needy person, it is necessary to control beggars in the society to control illegal activities such as drugs and traffic violation. If the beggar often getting free money, they don’t know the value of that eventually they misuse the fund for illegal activities such as drugs, liquor and they disturb the whole society. My personal experience is a best example for this. Recently when I was traveling to Texas, I donate couple dollars to the beggar sitting next to the railway station. After few minutes he was dunk and disturbing the city traffic. It doesn’t happen, if I wasn’t donating money.
Second, Free money often make the people lazy, because they were getting the money with free of cost. As a result they behave wild and prone for illegal activities like money robbery, chain snatching and so on. The recent incident happen at my apartments is a best example to describe this. There was a home less guy stay opposite to my hose, he use to begging everyone in that place. Recently, someone kidnapped a five years baby next my house and we gave complaint to cops. They caught the kidnaper and everyone was surprised by seeing the kidnaper because he is the same person to whom we are giving money every day.
In conclusion, I personally feel that giving money to a bagger is indirectly encouraging crime in a society. They always misuse the free money which leads to illegal activities and disturbance to the society. So, I recommend people that not to encourage any bagger until unless they are very old.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, still, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80446927374 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56480562529 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555865921788 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0606460779 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5263157895 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8421052632 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1610543839 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521702467985 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396039388488 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107380046213 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217458964512 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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