The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
This topic raises the controversial issue that use of mopeds for transportation in Balmer Island should be reduced in the summer season to decrease the rate of road accident between mopeds and pedestrians. This issue is full of holes and bullets and there are many flaws present in the issue. The author raised this step to limits the number of mopeds rented by island’s moped companies in summer season. Thus, I disagree with the author’s issue and suggestions to improve the flaws will be mentioned.
First of all, the major flaw of the issue is in the conclusion that the author wants to decrease the number of mopeds in the summer season in which the population of Balmer island increases up to 100,000. It states that, in summer months the trade and business also increases. If the number of mopeds decreases in the Balmer island, then there will be transportation problem for the people. In the improvement, proper steps should be taken by Balmer Island Council to reduce the rate of accidents from, mopeds such as speed limits etc.
Additionally, the author wants that the number of mopeds rentals from the mopeds rental companies should be reduced from 50 per day to 25 per day. This data is based on another town as island of Seaville as Seaville’s town council reduce the use of mopeds which shows that there is reduction in accident will attend 50 percent rate. The flaw is in this assumption is that it did not mentioned about accidents caused by only mopeds. It may be possible the accident can cause by any other means of transportation. To improve this, proper statistics should be mentioned about the accidents that cause by mopeds only or other vehicle.
However, there may be chances that rate of accidents can be reduced if number of mopeds in town is reduced. But before taking this step the council also do more research for the cause of accident and involvement of moped in them. The proper guidelines should be made to avoid the accidents in the Balmer Islands.
In conclusion, the argument is not reasoned properly and there are many flaws in this issue. But, as we know that every coin has two sides so proper actions should be taken to avoid this. The Balmer island’s council should work on the suggestions offered in the above paragraphs.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1839 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.668 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.454 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.955 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.343 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...n in Balmer Island should be reduced in the summer season to decrease the rate of road accident b...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'limit'.
Suggestion: limit
...e issue. The author raised this step to limits the number of mopeds rented by island&a...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 122, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...nts to decrease the number of mopeds in the summer season in which the population of Balmer islan...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 389, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
...s in this assumption is that it did not mentioned about accidents caused by only mopeds. ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, thus, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81725888325 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64811685324 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.431472081218 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8812642159 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8947368421 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248350616289 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915433812241 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785127392159 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163392374601 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901542030766 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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